Much Better lol.
1: throughout this, I hear a lot of frequency changes/ volume pulses.... (?). Which ever effect you used here, you should level it out a bit. It sounds like it's coming from the base... Very noticable at 2:17, and it again distracts from the overall sound.
2: <3 at 2:55
3: Also liked the ending. I like how it reached a climax, however, you might want to think about adding a "resolution", or return the the original theme, and downgrade from there. Just a suggestion, I don't know what your going for here. Is this part of the story line??